Reading orientation is Left to Right.
Chapter 1 The Watchman Series
Chapter 2 The Watchman Chapter 02 Page 01
Chapter 3 TheWatchman Chapter03 Pomp&Circumstance April2015
Chapter 4 TheWatchman Chapter04 Page01
Chapter 5 TheWatchman Chapter05 Page01
*Edit 10/7/2014--Totally changed Paul.
*Edit 10/4/2014--This is the final cover page. Thanks everyone for your feedback on the revised version. That really helped me. Luv n hugs to you all!
I'm in the process of creating this manga/comics at TwelveGates website. Like the saying goes, "No pain, no gain." This is a painfully detailed process I'm growing into. Seems like I'm learning to draw all over again. Let me know what you think about the cover.
Here's the summary of The Watchman:
On the hidden planet, Shatazar, Delah, falsely named princess and her cousin Teeabu, newly-ordained priest turned warrior, live under the powerful rule of the Watchman of Araidia. Given a mission to eradicate poisonous plants, Delah meets a boy from Earth who turns their lives upside down.
U capture manga very brilliantly. U should be very proud of ur Watchmen chapters and drawings. ☺️
I just wish that the type would stand out more from the illustration. (I'm a graphic designer, and I get super type nerdy, haha) I see that someone pointed out for the title. How about using all capital letters for the title? Like your 2nd chapter title. I feel like thin and tall looking typeface (so called condensed version) would look nice on this illustration. Also it could look modern.
YOU GOT THAT RIGHT, IT'S NOT GOOD! Yeah, I've been thinking of re-doing some pages before I post to Tapastic & other webtoon/manga sites. Thanks for pointing this out. It reinforces what I have to do.
The only thing I would change its the tittle. I'd edit it, bigger, and a clear font. So it gets more importance.
I think I have seen in japanese manga, some times the put the same cover twice.
One with all the text, where the art is in second layer.
and the next page is only the art.
It would be nice do it that way if you don't want hide it ^^
Also covers are great for the use of fans, so they'd love have the clean version too
And eyes of your characters look really great. Are much different than japaniese anime's but I like that!
I have no clue about the world, the characters, I am actually not that sci-fi-looking fan either BUT the story telling is very catchy. The off voice. Also the speed. Excellent
I have one fave page so far because of a very beautiful panel: page 10. I love both panels but mostly the upper one. I simply love it
I was having little trouble with the 1st panel on page 7. My eyes went to the right instead of downwards, that why I read the bubbles 1-3-2 instead of 1-2-3.
The language is a little to difficult for my English skills, too, but I enjoyed this nevertheless ^^
I don't know how it'll be getting the pages in pieces instead of devouring them all at once as I did, but I'l figure that out from now on
Keep on going!!
Yeah, these 13 pages go really quick. The art takes a very long time to do. But when you read it, everything passes by in minutes.
Please keep on commenting. Also commenting on the actual page is helpful because I will know exactly what you are talking about.
Nackmu, I really appreciate this. You have made me very happy!
here's one tip: when you're doing complicated images like these, play with the thickness of the lines a bit, in this way you can put different emphasis on the picture...
and don't be afraid to make the character touching each other..in this way people can look at them as a whole instead of flying their eyes around the page...k..what I'm trying to say is.....the three characters you have there....you can have one of the the bottom one facing the right, and make he/she closer to the other person...in this way they make a nice and stable triangle....right now the page look really slanted towards the left....
and also...if you want to emphasize the flower dude(because he looks kinda special and kinda different from the other two), try putting him on the top of the triangle...and the girl and the dude can be at the bottom, one facing left and one facing right 0-0...
one easy way to change their orientation is using photoshop...if you did this in layers you just select that character's layer and do a horizontal flip..
First of all, all of the characters look interesting. The woman is beautiful--I love her design a lot. I love her headgear... and now I'm particularly interested in that strange critter on her shoulder!! Anyhow, she's very gorgeous, and I look forward to learning about her! But then there's the blue-haired guy... OH, blue-haired guy. I think I'm in love with that fellow. His hair is AWESOME!! I love the unique style and the ties in it and the way it feathers up. It's really unique, and that's AWESOME! Meanwhile, you've drawn his muscles and stuff great! He just looks rockin'! And the final character, the blond... He looks really neat, too! I'm making the assumption that the woman is Delah, the blue-haired guy is Teeabu, and the blond is the guy from Earth?? Am I close...?
Meanwhile, the robotic world in the background, with all of its amazing details, is breathtaking. Even if only for this image, seeing the world like this has grasped my attention! Meanwhile, the flowers are a beautiful touch. It gives some life to the robotic world, which is AWESOME!!!
Finally, your coloring technique is incredible. I like your style of art in general, and I'm definitely pumped to see the manga! KEEP IT UP! It's gonna be great!!
Hey, I might need a lot of help doing the manga. This is my first time & I don't know what I'm doing... hehehehe. But I'm going to forge ahead. Struphic has given me some crucial help. I need to bring everything out in visualization & scene to scene action to show the story.
I think I'll need to submit the beginning pages to TG group here to get help (criticism). Pray for me & that this story shows the message that's in my heart (through ink work, paneling, and dialog that captivates the audience).
It's seems like 10 miles to get 10 paneled pages done. God bless you, Bert, in all that you do.
I will most definitely be praying for your success! I believe that if God called you to this, nothing can stand in your way! Keep giving it your all~